Anonymous said: you use them to seperate the normal text from tao's thoughts but it just confuses me because his thoughts are sometimes in the 1. person point of view and sometimes in the 3. and that's really messed up. you should decide on 1 way to do it. also you should tell more about taoris's relationship. were they really a couple or was it just tao imagining things on his own (maybe you already did, i will continue reading now). everything else is great :)
eeeehhhh you didn’t like the italics part??!!! *SOBS* i did it like that coz i liked switching around from first person to third, abruptly!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ITS MY FAV THING ABOUT MY WRITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
it’s a device i reeeeaally enjoy and wanted to try out..
i’ll go back and see what i can do..
:’( :’( :’(
is it really so terrible??
sorry, never mind, i’ll go and do something about it
eeehhehehe, not yet!! the explanation of the whole Taoris thing is something i’m holding off for an appropriate moment, i want to set it in a conversation between Tao and Sehun, and their relationship isnt there yet…
EDIT : okay,i’m putting all the thoughts in third person, with italics, (already finished the first few chapters, they were mostly already in third, anyway) so i hope its okay??
plus like you said, fixed the summary, this one’s better, right?
The japanese, i’ll try to get someone to fix that, just gimme a few days, ok
other than this, is it ok?? the story itself?? the writing, descriptive parts, the characters, etc??
And THANK YOU SOOO MUCH!!!